Tuesday, March 26, 2013

Snapshot Reveal: Cool by the River

This week's prompt had me stumped for the longest time, but then I met two brothers who just set the photo and mandatory words into action.

The inspiration comes from last week's Snapshot Prompt. Tomorrow we'll have a new one, so link up your own contribution soon. :)


Cool by the River

"Do you think if the train fell into the river it would cause a tsunami that would wipe out all the towns in it's path?"

Vic looked down at his little brother, curling his lip to show the six year old how much of a kid he still was.

"Not a chance." At eight, Vic was a lot more grown up than Ben. Vic didn't come up with silly stories any more. He had science in school that taught him how things really worked.

"Wouldn't it be cool, though?"

"It would make a big mess. Lots of houses would drown."

"The army would stop them."

"They couldn't get here fast enough."

Inangahua Junction bridge after the 1968 earthquakeThere was a long pause while Ben stared at the rock in his hand. The boys were sitting on the shore of the river, wishing they had something to fish with. Instead, all they had was a hard beach covered in a carpet of rocks and a bridge, each of it's legs a tall tower holding the rest of the world away from the brothers.

"Well, maybe it's bad guys who make the train fall. Maybe the army is already here to stop them but they're not quite fast enough to stop the train from falling but they can stop the tsunami."

Vic looked between the bridge and then down the river. He could see it all play out in his head, just like Ben said. Helicopters and motorcycles would be filling the sky with loud noises. The cars on the bridge would all crash together and their drivers would hide inside while guns went off all around them. The train would fall down into the water, landing all twisted like a broken snake that would set off the huge wave. It might work. Maybe. Vic glanced at Ben out of the corner of his eye.


Ben threw his rock into the water. It barely splashed.

"It would still be cool."

"Yeah," Vic gave in. "It would be cool."


  1. Fun piece, Carrie. Great banter with the boys. You made me smile. Reminded me so much of my crazy imagination as a kid when it wasn't bound by acquired logic and physics ... the things we conceived as youngsters!

    1. Haha - The things we still conceive today! I think we're never really out of the imagination vs. logic stage - at least, not as writers and artists.

  2. This is such a cute story, Carrie. It reminds me of some of the conversations I hear between my two kids who are right on the cusp of 5 and 7 years old. Just as in your story, my son is always giving his younger sister the logical viewpoint to counteract her imagination, yet you can tell his imagination is going wild.

    All that to say, you captured the sibling banter perfectly while also creating a vivid "what if" scenario. I love it!

    1. Thanks, Leanne. :) It's always nice to hear the age / antics line up in more than just my mind. My kiddos are still a bit younger than this, but my niece and nephews fall right in line, so I was able to take them for inspiration.


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